I enjoyed reading the paper about writing as an engineer. The paper gave a good outline over writing done in the specified field. The paper was not at all boring and although I am not interested in Engineering, I was able to find much of the information provided to be interesting.
However, I think the paper could use more detail with the mentioning of the several citations. I think that would help the reader be more understanding of what is being talked about. The introduction paragraph could include the "how?" of the paper (how you found all the information that you did/what you analyzed).
The paper could use more formal word usage. I was able to give my opinion on possible words that could be replaced. Also, I think the paper could have transitioning statements that go into the next subheading that will talked about rather than just ending with of sentence of analyzing a piece of work.
Your paper is well written, I didn't have trouble understanding your points or your language.
I think that you should introduce your first quote, rather than opening with it. It's a little abrupt for this style of writing. Also, I think that you could include a quote in your second paragraph about Audience in Academic Writing, rather than just describing the sources.
Overall, I think that your paper meets the criteria and was an interesting read, and there is nothing actually wrong in your paper, the edits I suggested are just personal preference. It is a good essay either way :)
I enjoyed reading the paper about writing as an engineer. The paper gave a good outline over writing done in the specified field. The paper was not at all boring and although I am not interested in Engineering, I was able to find much of the information provided to be interesting.
ReplyDeleteHowever, I think the paper could use more detail with the mentioning of the several citations. I think that would help the reader be more understanding of what is being talked about. The introduction paragraph could include the "how?" of the paper (how you found all the information that you did/what you analyzed).
The paper could use more formal word usage. I was able to give my opinion on possible words that could be replaced. Also, I think the paper could have transitioning statements that go into the next subheading that will talked about rather than just ending with of sentence of analyzing a piece of work.
Overall I saw a lot of great things!
Your paper is well written, I didn't have trouble understanding your points or your language.
ReplyDeleteI think that you should introduce your first quote, rather than opening with it. It's a little abrupt for this style of writing. Also, I think that you could include a quote in your second paragraph about Audience in Academic Writing, rather than just describing the sources.
Overall, I think that your paper meets the criteria and was an interesting read, and there is nothing actually wrong in your paper, the edits I suggested are just personal preference. It is a good essay either way :)